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Bryce 7 pro:

Mr.Wagner never believed in hell,
I don't much either, oh well...
to his amazed surprise, after he died,
his eternity's being spent hungry and fried,
cast down upon a burning plain,
ravenously hungry, skin boiling pain,
beside him a pile of mouldering dead,
he could endure the hunger, remain unfed,
but as he screamed his hatred to Gawd,
he left no fucking bone ungnawed.


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Belated credit: Sky by Sinober Thanks, RavynsWorld
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Topas2012 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Super well done :) great amazing work
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sed Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
:iconmotherofgod-plz: Well done!
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
Thank you.
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sed Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
:iconyoureverywelcomeplz:  
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Rabbit0808 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Ahhh, the ol' Lucifer's Weight loss Program. It's 100% effective and no one ever quits!!! Great pic!! Then again, they pretty much all are.

:D :-) :cowboy: :iconskeletonplz:

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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
You ah too kind, Suh! How you are?  And thanks!
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COLOREDINLOVE Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's perfect just the way it is~!!! Now I want some ribs~!!!! Hugs and kisses love!! I love the sky too! I hope he at least has a beer to wash down those dry toasty bones!!Mr Bones Cheers Pixel Bone - F2U! Spinning Bone (Dark Blue) - F2U! Spinning Bone (Brown) - F2U! Spinning Bone (Outline) - F2U! Jeff Noms 
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
:huggle: :iconbigheartplz:
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COLOREDINLOVE Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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RavynsWorld Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
:) (Smile)    I like that sky..
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
It a Sinober preset - Which I forgot to credit last night after I wrote the poem.  She abandoned her dA acct, but was kind enough to leave them, so you can get them and use them to make cool stuff.
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Whazizname Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014   General Artist
:thumbsup: :thumbsup:
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Thank you.
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Anovoca Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014   Writer
A lot of real emotion in this piece and it doesn't take your "poem" to figure that out either. Best I've seen from you so far this year. Excellent work!
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Well, I'm glad you liked it :D
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Anovoca Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014   Writer
yep, though I still wish you would let me help you with your poetry. :p
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
But I'm always interested in Better.  How would you help?
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Anovoca Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014   Writer
they certainly are fun but there are key components to poetry usually lacking. mostly meter. 

This is a watered down explanation and there are always exceptions to rules and exceptions to exceptions but each individual line must maintain a consitant beat. do-dah-do-dah-do-dah-do-dah rather than dah dah do do do do dah do. Every word in its annunciation has a stressed syllable. Poetry demands that this stressed syllable land on the same part of the beat. If the first syllable is stressed and the second is not then you must maintain that pattern of stressed unstressed throughout the verse. Using the first line of this poem as an example. MIS-ter WAG-ner NEV-er be-LIEVE in HELL. The stressed syllable switches halfway through. A simple fix would be Mr. Wagner Ner' believed in Hell. You could also substitute believe for a synonym that has a stressed first syllable.  Also the number of beats if odd must remain odd and if even must remain even. The first line has 10 syllables while the second has 7. this means that one line you end on an upbeat and the other you end on a downbeat.

These two rules are usually viewed as the most important, even more important that rhyming.

Hope that helps!
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Why?

People seem to like to read it and I enjoy writing it.  Sometimes everything from form my cadence is bad, but really only cadence/rhythm seems important to readers.
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Take it this way... at least it's not cold.
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Yeah! That one of the many things I like about you, you always see the silver lining. :)
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
What's the point of watching if we don't see it... just my thoughts.
I'm glad you feel ok about it.
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AtticBeneath Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're Mythopoetic bloom has come fully aloft

Or maybe I've just been missing somethin
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
Sometimes I feel like a nut, sometimes I don't.

While that doesn't actually change my reality, it sometimes changes my perception of it.
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AtticBeneath Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
have a drink on me:pirate::beer:
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